English grammar correction or validation. One sentence.

A friend of mine and I are debating the proper grammar structure of the sentence below.

"I can say that I was thinking of you with some degree of interest, too, this morning."

It doesn't seem to me that the first comma should be in there, but I suppose I could be wrong.  So, is the structure correct or not?
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srejjaAsked:
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dhsindy SparrowConnect With a Mentor Retired considering supplemental income.Commented:
Looks good to me as is but awkward.  The ", too," changes the meaning and should be set off with commas.

I would probably change "too" to "also" and put it after "I" like this:

"I, also, can say that I was thinking of you with some degree of interest this morning."
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csgeekpyroConnect With a Mentor Commented:
Grammatically speaking, neither comma is necessary, and actually improves the sentence flow to get rid of them both.

I would just say "I can say that I was thinking of you too this morning, with some degree of interest."

The sentence as it stands is just plain awkward.  Nobody would choose that structure because it's likelyhood for confusion is too high.
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srejjaAuthor Commented:
So I suppose the bottom line is that it is correct, but just unnecessarily confusing.
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