Grammar Check

I feel that this sentence has an artistic effect:

Stronger and stronger did the wind blow.

However, maybe it is not proper grammar.

Maybe this is correct grammar:  The wind blew stronger and stronger.

Please share your thoughts on this.
While the first route has an artistic effect, maybe it is not accepted to say it that way... (in the eyes of audience that might judge the content).

It is a fiction book.
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
You can write this:   Stronger and stronger, the wind blew!

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Paul SauvéRetiredCommented:
poetry knows no bounds
nobusCommented:
if you want to bring over a feeling, or idea, you do not need to follow correct grammar, as Paul posted above.
so it really depends on you - not on grammar
eg, if i want to give you the idea of going faster and faster, i can simply write Faster! FASTER !   FFAASSTTEERR !
there is no grammar,  no sentence at all
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Thibault St john Cholmondeley-ffeatherstonehaugh the 2ndCommented:
It may be the order that the ideas are presented.
In your artistic version we are given the feeling that something is strong and increasing in strength before we are told that it is the wind. So when we learn that it is the wind we already have the idea of its strength in our minds and as we didn't know originally what was stronger we can prepare ourselves for something much more powerful than just wind,  hurricanes or tornados perhaps.
If we are given the sentence which tells us first that it is wind we narrow those strength parameters to maybe a strong gust of wind, enough to fly a kite. It wouldn't make sense to say the hurricane blew  stronger and stronger but you hint at that impression by describing the strength first.
awking00Information Technology SpecialistCommented:
>>I feel that this sentence has an artistic effect:<<
Your feeling is correct. It's an author employing his/her artistic license.

>>However, maybe it is not proper grammar.<<
The grammar is okay, as well. If you are old enough to recall parsing sentences in school, where there was a protocol for defining certain parts of speech, whether words were subject or objects and the like, the following two sentences would parse exactly the same:
Stronger and stronger did the wind blow.
The wind did blow stronger and stronger.
BillDLCommented:
In my opinion "Stronger and stronger did the wind blow" is fine for poetry, either rhyming or prose, but in a novel I don't think it sounds right.  You would probably find a phrase like that as part of a longer sentence in novels dating back to the era of Charles Dickens, for example; "Stronger and stronger did the wind blow until the ship lurched precariously and the captain's hat blew off".  In a modern novel, however, I think it sounds antiquated, especially if left unresolved.

Perhaps your fiction novel is set in a historical (or even futuristic) time period where the artistic use would be more fitting in context with everything else and it would sound great, but I think it would be a little jarring or odd if seen in a novel that is set in a current time period.

I think the sentence really needs some form of resolution so that it doesn't just sound like a phrase that crops up oddly in the middle of nowhere.  It is hard to know for certain how it would "sit" amongst other sentences without seeing all of the adjacent content.

An example of resolving the sentence would be to add the result of the wind's increasing strength using "until" or "eventually" or "when suddenly".

People are less interested in absolutely correct grammar these days.  Some authors use short phrases or clauses to create impact.  While perhaps being grammatically incorrect, the phrases work and the reader isn't distracted by the oddity of not seeing a verb or conjunction.

"Wider and wider did the crack grow ......"
Until what?
... until the teetering car eventually plunged into the bottomless chasm".
... and suddenly water gushed down through the ceiling in a foaming roar".

You would not hear a meteorologist retrospectively reporting yesterday's weather on the TV by saying "Stronger and stronger did the wind blow".  It would be reported in expressions associated with that field such as "velocity", "force" (against a known scale), or "strength".  Every different field of work or play would phrase that same description in a different way, using differing expressions.

I think that the main aspect that disturbs me about "Stronger and stronger did the wind blow" is that "stronger" is a comparative adjective in the same way that "taller" is the comparative adjective in the sentence "The maple tree is taller than the oak tree".  As such it needs "than" to compare it with something else.  OK, so you might argue that the wind became stronger than it had been before, and then became even stronger than that, but it is still missing some kind of resolution in the absence of a direct comparison.

Remember also that you can use onomatopoeia to imply noise, strength, force, and so on.  You use a word that actually sounds like what it is describing when it is read.  This could be a word that contains multiple sibilants ("S" sounds) to conjure up the image of a hissing snake, or plosives to imply the sound of a loud clap of thunder or flapping sails.  A strong wind would "whistle" through obstacles at a lower speed, build up to a "whooshing", and eventually be felt "ripping" or "roaring" through or past something.  It all depends on how artistic you want to be.

Sorry if the above sounds very pedantic.  It is the way I normally speak and write.  Please also note that in the UK the full stop (period) is normally placed after the closing quotation mark, except in certain circumstances that are not significant enough to discuss here.
BillDLCommented:
Thank you Kyle
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