proof reading : letter to agency

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As per our discussion yesterday,as you proposed me to start Canada immigration process prior to IELTS exam does not make me sense.
It does not suite to my interest at all.The detail reasons are as below.

As I told you at the outset, I kept Canada PR/Other countries immigration as an option but not as my goal.
more than that, initiating process at this stage, I don't want to be in messy situation later incase I scored less than required one.
I know very well over all score for Canada get impacted because of delay, as I said above, I am NOT so keen to get PR.

There are host of people in my office with variety of background better than my language skills, Presently they are in back seat for immigration only for reason being is, as they falling short of required score.Nevertheless, I wish to appear for IELTS  as it is going to improvise my skills during my preparation irrespective of result. I am nothing to loose except the exam fee.

If God's will, if I made the score even above Band-7, we will start applying not just canada, List of other countries which you can process for immigration.

I will get back to you with IELTS results, till then we can communication through mails for any update/progress from either side.
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Guy Hengel [angelIII / a3]Billing EngineerCommented:
this would be my quick revision
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As per our discussion of yesterday, where you proposed me to start Canada immigration process prior to IELTS exam, I would like to clarify that this does not suit my interests. The detailed reasons are as below.

As I told you at the outset, I keep Canada PR/Other countries immigration as an option but not as my primary goal.
Also, by initiating that process already now, I don't want to be in messy situation later, in case I would score less than required.
I know very well that the overall score for Canada gets impacted due to a delay, as I said above, I am NOT so keen to get PR.

There are lots of people in my office, with variety of backgrounds, which do have better language skills than I do. Currently they are in the waiting loop for immigration only because they did not reach the required score.

Nevertheless, I wish to appear for IELTS  as it is going to improve my skills during my preparation, whatever the result would be. I have nothing to loose except the exam fee.

If God's will, and I realize a score even above Band-7, we can start applying for my immigation, but not exclusively for Canada, there are other countries that would be an option for me .

I will get back to you with my IELTS results, until then we can communication through mails for any update/progress from either side.
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mac_gAdmin - Oracle Fusion Middleware suiteAuthor Commented:
I liked your skills....

a small clarification, which is correct

As per our discussion of yesterday     -or - As per our discussion  yesterday
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Guy Hengel [angelIII / a3]Billing EngineerCommented:
as you want to refer to the discussion of yesterday, it should be written indeed like that.

I see the below options in writing it, in the order of (my) style preference

as we discussed yesterday
as by our discussion of yesterday
as by our yesterday discussion

though in your letter, you really want to refer to the discussion event, hence I put option 2 and not option 1.
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