xxxx Second anniversary...

Hello can someone proofread this email and possible embellish  it. and make this invitation irresistible .... Thank you

Hello Everyone,

Thank you everyone for the great night we had last night at XXX. A special thanks you goes to those of you who when to the concert such as Ramiro, Michaelanggello, Lisa, and Luis ( I apologize if I forget someone  else’s  name) who were able to involve and route numerous people to our venue after the concert of J. Balvin was finished.

AREA-3 Promotion Second Anniversary Birthday is this coming Saturday October 10th 2015. This is the most wanted event of the year for our team. Why?  Because this is the occasion to gather all the promoters that have been working with us for the past two years together during a special night. Also, because this is a great occasion to invite all our friends and thank them for their loyalty throughout those two years of fun with us.

I am sending this note to everyone to make sure that everyone understands that AREA-3 Promotion is you!! Without you AREA-3 would not exist! Everyone who has been working, and enjoy with us Lima, Barcode and Soundcheck is considered part of the team AREA-3 Promotion Team. Together, thanks to our dedication and ideas, we are able to amuse hundreds of guests every weekend. Let’s keep up with the great work for the months to come.  During the night of Saturday Free Salsa classes from 9:30 to 11:15pm will be taught by the teacher Digna Rodrigues followed by a delicious cake which will be served to all our guests.

Please, extend the invitation to all your friends!

Thank you for your cooperation to this event.
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Thank you to everyone for the great night we had yesterday at XXX. A special thank you to those of you who went to the concert such as Ramiro, Michelangelo, Lisa, and Luis who were able to involve and assist numerous people to our venue after the concert of J. Balvin was finished.  I apologize if I missed someone but, of course, thank you!

The AREA-3 Promotion Second Anniversary Birthday is coming this Saturday October 10th 2015. This is the most asked-for event of the year for our team. Why?  Because this is the occasion to gather together all the promoters that have been working with us for the past two years for a special night. Also, this is a great occasion to invite all our friends and thank them for their loyalty throughout these past two years of fun with us.

 I am sending this note to everyone to make sure that everyone understands that AREA-3 Promotion is really you! Without you, AREA-3 would not exist! Everyone who has been working with us and with Lima, Barcode and Soundcheck is considered part of the AREA-3 Promotion Team. Thanks to our dedication and ideas, we are able to amuse hundreds of guests every weekend. Let’s keep up with the great work for the months to come.  During the night of Saturday Free Salsa classes from 9:30pm to 11:15pm, guests will be taught by the teacher Digna Rodrigues followed by a delicious cake which will be served to all our guests.

 Please, extend the invitation to all your friends!

See what you think. I added a couple of words here there to make the paragraph flow more smoothly.
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regmigrantCommented:
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Thank you for making last night at XXX such a memorable occasion. Special thanks to those of you who attended the J. Balvin concert; Ramiro, Michaelangelo, Lisa and Luis in particular who got involved and helped route people to our venue after it finished - with my apologies and gratitude to anyone who’s name I’ve missed.
I am sending this note to everyone  because I want you all to understand that AREA-3 Promotions is not just a cool organisation with some great people; everyone involved in working with us; Lima, Barcode, Soundcheck is a key member of the AREA-3 Promotion Team and we will never forget that our success is based on your creativity, dedication and ideas.
The AREA-3 Promotions Second Anniversary is coming up on Saturday October 10th 2015 and I know it’s the most anticipated event on the calendar because it the day we celebrate the loyalty and hard work of promoters, friends and YOU! To show how much we appreciate the loyalty and support over the past two years and recognise the dedication and professionalism it takes to amuse and entertain hundreds of guests every weekend we are having a party for OUR guests and those who help us achieve success; there will be music and Salsa lessons from Digna Rodriquez (9:30 to 11:15pm) followed by delicious cake for everyone!
Please extend this invitation to all your friends and I look forward to seeing you on Saturday!
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ItaliabellaAuthor Commented:
both excellent ! now I don't know which on to pick ;)
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
@Italiabella  - Thanks and I was happy to help. Split is a good idea if you are happy with both answers.
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