Newsletter at the B....H....Community
Hello A and B and happy Halloween,
B my name is xxxxx xxxxxx and I am following up on the below email that A forwarded to you a few days ago, I would like to know if there is the possibility for me to advertise my services on the B.... H..... newsletter.
I would like to advertise my technical service using the same flyer I use for the W...... at L.......... Community. See attached sample.
As a matter of fact even this morning another family contacted me for some technical issues with their computers. For this reason I would like to keep offering my services to many more families in your communities.
If requested, I can also provide excellent references from the families that I am currently supporting in your community.
Thank you very much for your attention,
B my name is xxxxx xxxxxx and I am following up on the below email that A forwarded to you a few days ago, I would like to know if there is the possibility for me to advertise my services on the B.... H..... newsletter.
I would like to advertise my technical service using the same flyer I use for the W...... at L.......... Community. See attached sample.
As a matter of fact even this morning another family contacted me for some technical issues with their computers. For this reason I would like to keep offering my services to many more families in your communities.
If requested, I can also provide excellent references from the families that I am currently supporting in your community.
Thank you very much for your attention,
Stephen Kairys
OK, sorry I didn't see this earlier. Will respond by 1645 UCT. Thanks.
ASKER
Thank you Stephen...
Here's my first draft; however, please see my comments footnoted with 1,2,3 etc.
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Hello A and B,
(1)
B, my name is xxxxx xxxxxx and I am following up on the below email that A forwarded to you a few days ago. I would like to know if there it is possible for me to advertise my technical service (2)on the B.... H..... newsletter. I would like do so using the same flyer I use for the W...... at L.......... Community. Please see the attached sample.
As a matter of fact, another family (3) contacted me this morning for some technical issues with their computers. Accordingly, I would like to keep offering my services to many more families in your communities.
If requested, I can also provide excellent references from the families I am currently supporting in your community.
Thank you very much for your attention,
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NOTES:
1. I removed Happy Halloween b/c I did not think it belonged in a business letter.
2. Does this technical services have a name?
3. Please clarify "another family"...is this another family in the communities to which you wish to advertise? Do these communities include "L.... Community?"?
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Hello A and B,
(1)
B, my name is xxxxx xxxxxx and I am following up on the below email that A forwarded to you a few days ago. I would like to know if there it is possible for me to advertise my technical service (2)on the B.... H..... newsletter. I would like do so using the same flyer I use for the W...... at L.......... Community. Please see the attached sample.
As a matter of fact, another family (3) contacted me this morning for some technical issues with their computers. Accordingly, I would like to keep offering my services to many more families in your communities.
If requested, I can also provide excellent references from the families I am currently supporting in your community.
Thank you very much for your attention,
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NOTES:
1. I removed Happy Halloween b/c I did not think it belonged in a business letter.
2. Does this technical services have a name?
3. Please clarify "another family"...is this another family in the communities to which you wish to advertise? Do these communities include "L.... Community?"?
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ASKER
Yes, I saw it. It is excellent. Thank you so much as usual for your great help. and I apologize for the delay in responding.
My pleasure! No worries per the delay in responding. Glad I was able to help!
Steve
Steve