Biking in November

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Subject: A very lucky day…

Today, I was biking admiring the beautiful leaves changing colors. When  I decided to stop for drinking some water and eating an apple. All the sudden, a fearless “bambi” came out from the wood asking for a bite of my apple…. So I gave it to him….
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Stephen KairysTechnical Writer - ConsultantCommented:
Subject: A Very Lucky Day

Today, I was biking, and admiring the beautiful leaves changing colors. I stopped to drink water and eat an apple. Suddenly, a fearless "Bambi" came out from the woods. She asked for a bite of my apple. So, I gave it to her.

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I love this paragraph! :o)  One thing: "Bambi" is a female name. So, I changed "gave it to her" to "gave it to him.". :)
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
Some thoughts for you:

Today, I was riding my bike and admiring the beautiful leaves changing colors in the late Fall. I decided to stop to get a drink of water and eat an apple. All the sudden, a fearless “bambi” (little deer) came out of the woods wanting a bite of my apple.  So I gave it to him….

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The little deer that are around my cottage do not come this close.
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crystal (strive4peace) - Microsoft MVP, AccessRemote Training and ProgrammingCommented:
Today, while riding my bike, I admired the beautiful changing colors of the leaves. I stopped to drink some water and eat an apple.  All of a sudden, a fearless "bambi" came out from the wood, looking at my apple ... so I shared.
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ItaliabellaAuthor Commented:
Hello Everyone,

In whole my life this is the first time that a wild little dear come close to me looking for food. It made me feel special this is why I took some memorably pic and I will shared them with friends...thank you for correcting my paraghaph..all the version are great but I like how crystal said looking at my apple....so I shared...:)

thank you everyone....next I am preparing a newsletter in occasion of thanksgiving for all my clients....coming next for grammar revision.......
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crystal (strive4peace) - Microsoft MVP, AccessRemote Training and ProgrammingCommented:
you're welcome ~ happy to help
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