Is this phrase correct

Is this phrase correct?

"View own added record and clients task assigned to"

I am trying to say  "The user can only view the records that he/she personally entered or the clients which have tasks that ara assigned to user" shortest possible
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myyisAsked:
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JohnConnect With a Mentor Business Consultant (Owner)Commented:
Try:  Owner can change own record or any record assigned to this owner.

User can change own record or any record assigned to this user.
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Paul MacDonaldDirector, Information SystemsCommented:
"View your client tasks and records."?
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David GipeConnect With a Mentor Commented:
I am assuming you are trying to stay away from the "you" and "your" references ...

Something like ... "Only able to view entered records or clients associated with assigned tasks" ... but I don't quite like this wording yet. I'll keep rolling it around.
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
Too short is not always good for clarity.

Try this:

You can view your own records and the records of any client assigned to  you.

Very clear and unambiguous.
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myyisAuthor Commented:
Hi guys,
1. I cannot use "you"  or " your" because the admin is selecting a permission type for a specific user
2.  I need to mention "own records" because she/he can only view the records he/she added.
3. "Only able to view entered records or clients associated with assigned tasks" This is what I need but shorter.

Thank you all.
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
I cannot use "you"  or " your"


This prevents clarity and there is no way to be unambiguous without "you" or "your"
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slightwv (䄆 Netminder) Commented:
Maybe:
Only assigned or personally entered records are viewable.
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myyisAuthor Commented:
If I use present tense, how doest that sound? I think it captures the meaning "can view"  or  "viewable"

"View only assigned or personally entered records"
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myyisAuthor Commented:
Or

"View own record and client tasks assigned"
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
That could work and is close to what I suggested above.
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slightwv (䄆 Netminder) Commented:
>>"View only assigned or personally entered records"

I'm far from an English major but I it seems like a fragment to me.

"What" can view?
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David GipeCommented:
I like where SLIGHTWV is going ... with a slight change ... Only assigned tasks, associated clients and personally entered records are viewable.
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myyisAuthor Commented:
Even it is not very clear my favorite until now is "View own record and client tasks assigned".
(If it does not have a grammer problem!)
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JohnBusiness Consultant (Owner)Commented:
It works but some persons may be confused. My own suggested immediately above is a bit longer but very clear.
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larryhSr. Software EngineerCommented:
The answer to this question depends on where the sentence is to be used and who the audience is.  If we knew more we could be more precise.

Slight variation:

"Only a user's assigned tasks, associated clients and personally entered records are viewable. "
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